Good Charries and Mary Sues
Hopefully, you've read the rules and the vocabulary. If not, read those first.
The following charrie forms represent what a good charrie is like, and what to stay away from.
While both forms are for female characters, the same rules apply for male characters: include flaws, don't make them "perfect." Characters, like people, are cooler when they aren't perfect.
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The Good Charrie
The following is a real form from a real roleplay, used with permission.
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Name: Elise Hampton
Appearance: Elise is a tall, strong
woman, standing at 6'3''. She has features that could be called pretty, but
she's not anything special. Her eyes are a bright, cheery speedwell blue and are
usually sparking with devious thoughts. Her nose is a little large and a little
crooked from having been broken once. Her hair, which is wavy and cut to chin
length, is usually messy and a weird golden red, like that of an Irish Setter.
She's usually smiling, usually madly so, and her teeth are just a bit crooked.
She has a dimple in her left cheek and freckles. Her hands are a bit large but
in proportion with the rest of her, and her fingers are quite nimble. She's
strong in a hardy way, not a bulky way. She has long legs, broad shoulders, and
a straight back along with big feet.
Personality: Elise is very
lively. She's quick to like people but also quick to fight with them. She
doesn't forgive easy and doesn't give up easy either. She's determined,
hot-headed, independent, yet a fast friend and fiercely loyal. She's usually
loud, but gets quiet when she needs to. She's quick to laugh and hates to cry,
choosing to get furious instead. However, it's very rare that she gets furious
because if she's truly mad, she gets calm instead. She has a bright smile and a
drunk-on-life attitude, and is reckless. She can throw a punch but isn't a good
fighter, she can spit pretty damn far, and is almost fearless. She cares deeply
about people, even when she has to do unpleasant things for her job. Elise is
great with a gun and is skilled with knives. Her reckless nature makes her
ignore pain until the fight is over. She likes people, and her friendly nature
has won over many an ally. She's been off the system since she turned 18, and is
smart about avoiding being traced. She can tell a lot about a person just by
shaking their hand, and she's wicked at tying and untying knots. Elise is a
terrible fighter and hardly ever wins in hand-to-hand combat. This means she
usually has cronies around during a mission. She's also a drinker, which leads
to problems that don't need explaining. Her friendliness also means that she
gets as attached to her enemies as she does to her allies, which sucks if you
need to kill someone.
History: Elise grew up on a farm in Illinois,
where she and her four brothers lived a good, happy childhood. Her father,
unknown to the family, was actually an agent for the FBI. The family believed he
was an air marshal. He was killed in the field when she was just sixteen.
Shortly after this, she moved to Ennedy for college, where she planned to become
a police officer. However, after coming in contact with one of her father's old
partners, she found out all the secrets of how her father was killed, what his
job really was, and how the FBI covered it up to hide information from her
family. Furious, she began planning attacks against the FBI. This mostly
involved screwing with their computers and getting dirt on agents at first, but
she soon got the attention of a crime ring, the Valkyries. A simple crime ring
dealing in transport of weapons to criminals and organizing jailbreaks, they had
become a threat to national security after they stole a commercial jet. They
needed members like Elise. Within a few years, she rose through the ranks to
become second in command, preceeded only by the founder of the ring, a man known
only as J, (most members use letters as codenames.) Since then, Elise has been
causing both local chaos and national chaos as well as helping rid the city of
enemies to the Valkyries, both from other gangs and from law
enforcement.
Other: Elise is funny about things. If she has to kill
someone, she likes to make it personal. One of the reasons she hates field
fights and hand-to-hand is because she has to kill without making things "right"
first. She likes one-on-one fights, executions, etc better because she can talk
to the victim first. It's kind of sick, but she feels the need to reassure the
people she's killing.
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Name: Elise Hampton
Appearance: Elise is a tall, strong
woman, standing at 6'3''. She has features that could be called pretty, but
she's not anything special. Her eyes are a bright, cheery speedwell blue and are
usually sparking with devious thoughts. Her nose is a little large and a little
crooked from having been broken once. Her hair, which is wavy and cut to chin
length, is usually messy and a weird golden red, like that of an Irish Setter.
She's usually smiling, usually madly so, and her teeth are just a bit crooked.
She has a dimple in her left cheek and freckles. Her hands are a bit large but
in proportion with the rest of her, and her fingers are quite nimble. She's
strong in a hardy way, not a bulky way. She has long legs, broad shoulders, and
a straight back along with big feet.
Personality: Elise is very
lively. She's quick to like people but also quick to fight with them. She
doesn't forgive easy and doesn't give up easy either. She's determined,
hot-headed, independent, yet a fast friend and fiercely loyal. She's usually
loud, but gets quiet when she needs to. She's quick to laugh and hates to cry,
choosing to get furious instead. However, it's very rare that she gets furious
because if she's truly mad, she gets calm instead. She has a bright smile and a
drunk-on-life attitude, and is reckless. She can throw a punch but isn't a good
fighter, she can spit pretty damn far, and is almost fearless. She cares deeply
about people, even when she has to do unpleasant things for her job. Elise is
great with a gun and is skilled with knives. Her reckless nature makes her
ignore pain until the fight is over. She likes people, and her friendly nature
has won over many an ally. She's been off the system since she turned 18, and is
smart about avoiding being traced. She can tell a lot about a person just by
shaking their hand, and she's wicked at tying and untying knots. Elise is a
terrible fighter and hardly ever wins in hand-to-hand combat. This means she
usually has cronies around during a mission. She's also a drinker, which leads
to problems that don't need explaining. Her friendliness also means that she
gets as attached to her enemies as she does to her allies, which sucks if you
need to kill someone.
History: Elise grew up on a farm in Illinois,
where she and her four brothers lived a good, happy childhood. Her father,
unknown to the family, was actually an agent for the FBI. The family believed he
was an air marshal. He was killed in the field when she was just sixteen.
Shortly after this, she moved to Ennedy for college, where she planned to become
a police officer. However, after coming in contact with one of her father's old
partners, she found out all the secrets of how her father was killed, what his
job really was, and how the FBI covered it up to hide information from her
family. Furious, she began planning attacks against the FBI. This mostly
involved screwing with their computers and getting dirt on agents at first, but
she soon got the attention of a crime ring, the Valkyries. A simple crime ring
dealing in transport of weapons to criminals and organizing jailbreaks, they had
become a threat to national security after they stole a commercial jet. They
needed members like Elise. Within a few years, she rose through the ranks to
become second in command, preceeded only by the founder of the ring, a man known
only as J, (most members use letters as codenames.) Since then, Elise has been
causing both local chaos and national chaos as well as helping rid the city of
enemies to the Valkyries, both from other gangs and from law
enforcement.
Other: Elise is funny about things. If she has to kill
someone, she likes to make it personal. One of the reasons she hates field
fights and hand-to-hand is because she has to kill without making things "right"
first. She likes one-on-one fights, executions, etc better because she can talk
to the victim first. It's kind of sick, but she feels the need to reassure the
people she's killing.
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The Mary Sue
The following is a sample charrie made from bits and pieces of real Sues found in a variety of roleplays. While it is obvious that this is meant to be a sarcastic parody of a Mary Sue, understand that if your character in any way resembles this specimen, you may be a Mary Sue.
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Name: Enoby "Mary Sue" Kai Lee Rose Grace Lovelyface, but she likes to
be called Starr.
Appearance: Starr is really tall for her age, which is fifteen, and
she's like six feet tall. She's really pretty and she's so beautiful that
everyone fall in love with her. One of her eyes is really bright blue and the
other is rainbow because she was experimented on as a kid~. She has perfect
blonde hair that changes color with her mood and it's usually pink and black
because she's so hyper and gothic sometimes, and it's really long, like to her
ankles~. She has a pretty smile and good teeth that are pearly white and glow in
the dark. She has dimples too but she hates them because they're too cute. Her
boobs are sort of big and she hates that everyone stares at them, lol. Even
though she's really skinny, she's super strong and can lift like three hundred
pounds really easily. She has pretty angel wings that help her fly but they're
not big or anything, she can hide them. She's part cat, too, but only when she's
hyper.
Personality: Starr is always smiling and happy but behind that smile
she has a broken heart. :( She gets along with everyone except for people she
hates like mean people but she always forgives them~. She likes to fight but
just to prove that she can beat anybody at their own game. She hates being girly
and can beat up all the boys but they love her anyway. She's never mad at
anyone~. Also, she's secretly broken inside. :( She gets mopey and needs lots of
love but she never stays sad long. She's not afraid of anything! Except getting
broken hearted. But no one can break her, so there. She's really good at
fighting and knows all the karate moves and can use most weapons perfectly but
uses a sword because killing people with guns is bad and swords are noble.
History: Starr was born in America but her parents were killed by
ninjas who then kidnapped her and her twin brother. They named her Enoby like
ebony because her hair was black like midnight. Her nickname Mary Sue is because
she's perfect, Kai Lee because it's her Japanese name that means beautiful rose,
Rose Grace because she's so pretty and graceful and Lovelyface was her real last
name anyway. So she and her brother were raised by ninjas and missed their
parents so much but loved the ninjas too. Then a scientist kidnapped them and
they got away, but he experimented on them first and gave them animal DNA and
super powers first. Then her brother was killed by some enemy ninjas and he
died. :( Starr got the nickname Starr when it was found out that she was the
chosen one in a prophecy where she was going to save the world and end global
warming and stuff. She was in love with a boy but he broke her heart and it
makes her sad~.
Other: She can fly and is super strong and can control emotions too.
Oh, and she can firebend and heal wounds too. She has a pet wolf named Konichi
and she can talkto him because she speaks wolf.
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Name: Enoby "Mary Sue" Kai Lee Rose Grace Lovelyface, but she likes to
be called Starr.
Appearance: Starr is really tall for her age, which is fifteen, and
she's like six feet tall. She's really pretty and she's so beautiful that
everyone fall in love with her. One of her eyes is really bright blue and the
other is rainbow because she was experimented on as a kid~. She has perfect
blonde hair that changes color with her mood and it's usually pink and black
because she's so hyper and gothic sometimes, and it's really long, like to her
ankles~. She has a pretty smile and good teeth that are pearly white and glow in
the dark. She has dimples too but she hates them because they're too cute. Her
boobs are sort of big and she hates that everyone stares at them, lol. Even
though she's really skinny, she's super strong and can lift like three hundred
pounds really easily. She has pretty angel wings that help her fly but they're
not big or anything, she can hide them. She's part cat, too, but only when she's
hyper.
Personality: Starr is always smiling and happy but behind that smile
she has a broken heart. :( She gets along with everyone except for people she
hates like mean people but she always forgives them~. She likes to fight but
just to prove that she can beat anybody at their own game. She hates being girly
and can beat up all the boys but they love her anyway. She's never mad at
anyone~. Also, she's secretly broken inside. :( She gets mopey and needs lots of
love but she never stays sad long. She's not afraid of anything! Except getting
broken hearted. But no one can break her, so there. She's really good at
fighting and knows all the karate moves and can use most weapons perfectly but
uses a sword because killing people with guns is bad and swords are noble.
History: Starr was born in America but her parents were killed by
ninjas who then kidnapped her and her twin brother. They named her Enoby like
ebony because her hair was black like midnight. Her nickname Mary Sue is because
she's perfect, Kai Lee because it's her Japanese name that means beautiful rose,
Rose Grace because she's so pretty and graceful and Lovelyface was her real last
name anyway. So she and her brother were raised by ninjas and missed their
parents so much but loved the ninjas too. Then a scientist kidnapped them and
they got away, but he experimented on them first and gave them animal DNA and
super powers first. Then her brother was killed by some enemy ninjas and he
died. :( Starr got the nickname Starr when it was found out that she was the
chosen one in a prophecy where she was going to save the world and end global
warming and stuff. She was in love with a boy but he broke her heart and it
makes her sad~.
Other: She can fly and is super strong and can control emotions too.
Oh, and she can firebend and heal wounds too. She has a pet wolf named Konichi
and she can talkto him because she speaks wolf.